Ayame Kouryuu [Done]

[frozenwaterz]

AYAME KOURYUU:: is presented by
FrozenWaterz, who's been roleplaying for 2 1/2 to 3 years and is 17 years old. FrozenWaterz also plays no other charatures currently.

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◊ && This Better Be Something ◊

The birth certificate reads Ayame Kouryuu
But You Better Call Me Yuumei, Tsuki, and Aya
I've Seen the World For seventeen years
As I've Been Around Since birthdate (day and month only)
Making Myself Known As Student/Part-time Kaiba Corp Worker
I Duel With Dark Deck (Destruction/Beat Down)

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◊ && This Face is Going Somewhere ◊

;;Clothing;;
Ayame is not a person picky about what she wears. She does not care about fashion or how good it is. All she cares about is about here wearing something easy to wear. However there are two things she rarely wears and she despise to even use. The first is bright colors. She rarely every wear colors like yellow, purple, and especially pink. She thinks that wearing bright colors colors makes one stand out and look idiotic- hence her not wearing those bright and cheery colors.Color scheme wise: she prefers red, grey, black, and silver.

She also doesn’t wear skirts or dresses. This is because she believes that this will hinder her movement in battle. She also believes she doesn’t look good in this type of clothing. So she tries to avoid this group of outfits as best as she could. However, she does where the formal clothing if she has to wear it (even if she doesn’t like it). If so- it is usually traditional silk kimonos.

Her outfit changes depending on her mood. It is known to change from time to time. It was also known to be changed to suit the needs of the occasion. However she does have a standard outfit that she uses. This outfit is her prefer to wear and is the most confront-able one to her to wear.

On her upper body she usually has on a dark navy blue Chinese top. Underneath this top is a fishnet shirt that extends to her wrists. This fishnet is not just a fashion accessory, it has a purpose. She also has an ankle length black trench coat with light blue edges, grey lining, and silver buckles. She usually just wears it or wrap around her waist. It has the clan marking of the Kouryuu crest the symbol on the back- a navy blue and silver dragon. The coat has deep pockets-both on the inside and outside of the coat. These pockets are where she stores many things, though they are sometimes crammed with sweets-mainly Pocky (preferably milk and strawberry flavored).

On her legs is a pair of long gray pants that ends at her ankles. The material the pants are made off isn’t easily ripped yet it is easy to move in. It got deep pockets that she usually puts her hands to when she is bored. Around her waist are many belts and attached to these belts are pouches and more pouches. Also, hanging from her pockets is a couple of steel chains. On her feet she wears a pair of boots. These boots are made of black leather and have silver colored metal toes/bottoms and sapphire blue lacing.

She also has some accessories on her body. She has bandages that are tightly wrapped around her right lower arm along with both of her legs. She wraps a black scarf with silver and blue snowflakes around her neck. However, she occasionally wraps it around her waist. She also wears a pair of sunglasses. These glasses are black with silver and blue frames. Finally, she also wears a pair of thick leather fingerer-less gloves. These also have metal plates on the front of them.

;;Physical Appearance;;
Ayame seems to most a blossoming young woman. She has dark midnight raven hair ends at her waist. She takes great care of it- for it is one of the things she pride in herself. Meaning it is soft and fluffy. Sadly it takes a while a dry and it requires a lot of attention and care. This is why her hair is slightly messy of times, because most of the time she doesn’t have the time to care for it. She usually ties it up in a ponytail or has it just hang loose. If she ties her hair in a ponytail she usually uses silk cool color ribbons. Behind her left ears she usually has a flower or a pencil behind it.

Her eyes are piercing sky blue like are the color of the clear. However when frustrated or depressed- she her eyes change to a metallic silver color. They seem to pierce through the other person’s soul if you look at them. That is why people don’t look into her eyes. They also have an hollow and emotionless look in the them. Her eyes are a warning sign to whether her darker personality comes out or not. If they have a more ruthless then usual look in them – then you better look out.

Her skin is a pale peach like complexion. It almost seems like it never darken or get sun burned. Many people compare it to freshly fallen snow. Many people think this is caused by Ayame’s habits of not going out during the day much but these are just rumors because Ayame never denies or confirm them.

Her body is slimly built and very slender-even if she is a bit short for her age. Because of her frail appearance most people think she is sickly and weak. However this is far from the opposite and is in fact stronger then most her gender. This causes a lot of surprises and shock from the people around her.




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◊ && I’ve Wasted Enough Time Already ◊

Ayame’s past and origins are a mystery. She knew how she found, because of the head owner of the orphanage’s diary entries. At the time she discovered this, she was living in the Orphanage and was in Cairo, Egypt. The owners of the place said she was found by shore by the Nila in a basket. She was a new borne, barely a few days old.

However she was considered an odd child, even more then some others. One reason was because of her alertness of the surrounding. She was looking around with her wide blue eyes at the surrounding area.
The second was how quiet and calm she was. She was not making any loud fuse or loud noises. There was nothing in the basket besides a name tag. That name tag was her Name: Ayame Kouryuu. This meant the Night Rain of the Rain Dragon in Japanese. This puzzled the caretakers greatly because of her foreign blood. However the old owner decided to take her in and let her be raised there.

As she grew up, she was considered and outcast to the other orphans. They picked at her for her heritage, her weird name, and foreign looks. However, Ayame was not fazed by this at all. She kept smiling and trying to prove herself to the others. She tried many times and was made a fool in front of the others, but she gradually began to succeed. The other orphans began to accept her. However, her luck turned worse on the next event in her life story. When she was 4, the orphanage was set aflame by some troublemakers and burnt to the ground. No was dead or injured, however the orphans had no place to stay anymore unless they were adopted. Luckily for the other orphans, they got guardianships quickly this way. Unluckily for Ayame, no one wanted her. So she had to start living on the streets by herself and fend for herself.

She was able to make some money for food, education, and an occasional place to stay by doing a job. This job was at a repair shop for electronics. One of her old caretakers had taken pity on her and decided to teach her a trade. She couldn’t take care of her so the caretaker decided to teach her something to help her survive. This trade was something Ayame had a keen interest in: electronics and technology. Even after these difficulties she had her hopes high, waiting for something good to happen. The caretaker also taught her cooking and some other home skills. However she was still loney even with the love of the old caretaker. She really wanted something good to happen soon.

That good thing happened a few days before her 6th birthday. She was running from some merchants when she bumped into a person. This person was dressed up in fine suit and was obviously not from Egypt. The man looked down at her for a few seconds before chuckling. He stood in front of her, protecting her from the enraged merchants. While discussing in another language that she didn’t understand (English) to the Merchants the man managed to get them to calm down. He even paid for the goods Ayame just stole from them. He then turned to Ayame and introduced himself as Ryuujin Long. He told Ayame he knew who Ayame is and that she was looking for.

Ryuujin stated that he was good friends with both of her parents and that the fact that he was her uncle. He told Yukiko that if her parents didn’t leave her at the shore, she would be like they are right now. When she asked who killed them Ryuujin was quiet and didn’t say a word. Ryuujin then said that he will be taking her to China to get a proper education if that is what she wanted. Excited about a chance to change her life, she excitedly agreed. They then boarded the quickest plane to China from where they were. This was the start of the happiest years of her life.

When they got there, the two took a taxi to get to their true destination. The true destination was a large estate in the country side but not too far from the city. When she just got out of the taxi, she was knocked to the ground. She was knocked down by a blond haired boy with brown eyes. He then apologized and introduced himself, revealing that he was the son of Ryuujin Long: Jian Long. After a few seconds later after she got acquainted with the rest of the people in the manor Jian asked Ayame if she ever played Duel Monsters before. In a clueless expression, she asked what Duel Monsters was. This caused Jian to almost faint in shock. He quickly explained that it was a trading card game that was just introduced and was starting to get better known. He asked her if she wanted to learn to play and Yukiko excited stated yes.

During her lessons at the age of 12, Ayame became more and more attracted by Technology/Computers. The others encouraged her to continue in this field. This caused Yukiko to be glad of her current life right now. She had found the place she belonged to and people supported her. By this time also, she was finally around Jian’s level and managed to beat him. This caused him to smile and he told her to close her eyes. She opened them and found her holding Apollo’s main deck. He told her that she earned them and made her promised that she will make him proud.

After two years (she is now 14) of waiting, she decided to enter the England Dueling Championships. She managed to win enough tournaments to enter this even that she was waiting for. When she entered the Duel Arena, they looked at her in silence. Soon it turn to full blown laughter. How can such a petite young girl like her enter the tournament and actually win?! At this time, China’s duelists were almost all males and the few female duelists that do play duel monsters are not serious at it enough to play in big tournaments like the championships. This caused her to clench her fist in anger. She will show those fools she is not someone to underestimate. Because they underestimated her, she knew it was going to be their undoing. Her first opponent was a fan favorite. He said he would go easy on her-in the end he used all his power and still was crushed. This happened repeatedly until the finals.

Unlike the others, this guy was serious. He did not underestimate at all during his match. He was using his full force like a charging fast. They were tied neck to neck-with he opponent leading (she had 500 life points while he had 1000). At this point he acknowledged her strength and admitted she was better then most of the competitors of the tournament-how he stated he was going to win. This caused Yukiko to smirk and she was thankful for the match-however after her draw she was going to wrap this duel up.

Currently, her opponent’s trap/spell card was empty. She had one trap card face down and that was DNA Surgery. They had each a monster on the field. Yukiko had her Cybernetic Alligator and her opponent had a Tri Horn Dragon out. Yukiko activated Scapegoat and chained it by activating DNA Surgery-turning all the monsters into dragons. This caused her opponent to be confused. Why did she activated Scapegoat and used DNA Surgery? Yukiko smirked and revealed her last card in her hand, the one she just drew: Polymerization. She then declared she will fused all her monsters on the field and Fusion Summoned her trump card- Five God Dragon. She declared an attack and she won the duel. This caused everyone shock. After the announcer recovered from shock, he declared she won the duel.

A year (she is now 15) she is now past since that duel, and she was quickly becoming one of the best duelists out there in Europe. The next China Championships fast approaching and many people wondered if she would defend her title. Over the year since her champion final match, she was slowly gaining support. She made it up to finals again, this time against a duelist with a Spell Caster deck-his name? Lucian Magi. However, she won again with a different combo. As she looked around in the award ceremony, she saw her final opponent clutching his fist tightly and shaking. It seemed like he was plotting something, however she decided she was just over thinking and just shook it off. Unfortunately, she was correct about him plotting something. That something totally changed her view of life and changed her way of thinking and her pleasant life style.

When she arrived home, it was much to quiet. So something must have happened. She noticed the front door of the estate was broken down and smashed to pieces. This caused her panic and run inside the estate, not caring what danger lied up ahead. She found Lucian standing in front of her with a demented grin on his face. Pointing at Ayame, he demands a rematch or her adopted family gets it aka get killed. Having no choice, she agreed and they began the duel. This time, Lucian seemed much stronger. He was going at full power and not holding back. She was down to 50 life points and had no monsters on the field or any trap/spell cards in the magic/trap zone. Suddenly she blacked out.

When she woke up, she saw the solemn look on Jian’s useful cheerful face. She asked him why he looked so pale and depressed. Apollo stated he was worry about her-he stated she almost died. He broke down into tears and stated he did not want to loose another person. In a depressed tone, he stated that Ryuujin did not survived from his injuries. This caused Yukiko to broke down into tears and hugged Apollo tightly.
As soon as she did this she broken down crying and Apollo, though sad himself, tried to cheer her up.

Apollo and Yukiko then packed up their things-since they were moving to Japan. They did not want to stay at the estate because of the memories. During the time they were packing up-Yukiko announced that she is retiring from dueling. This caused a small uproar-however over the next months her records were deleted and now only few know of her existence in Duel Monsters. When she arrived in Japan three things were changed.

Recently, Ayame had a problem: they are running low on cash. A friend of theirs suggested that Yukiko work at Kaiba corp. At first Ayame was totally against this-because Kaiba corps recent projects resolve around duel monsters and the CEO being a duel monster champion. If he found about her past in Duel Monsters- they might bother her into dueling for the company in tournaments. However after being blackmailed by Jian and Chang (her friend) Ayame grudgingly decided to work for Kaiba Corp.
The plus side is the big amount of cash she earns.




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◊ && I’m the Next Great Thing ◊

Ayame is a hard character to describe. When in public she puts on a mask over her true personality. She almost never let people see her true self and if they manage to catch a glimpse of her true self she pushes them away. She is afraid that she might be abandoned if she shows weakness/vulnerability and will be left alone. That is why she pushes people away-thinking that might leave her in the end. However, to the few that gains her trust and devotion she is loyal to the end and can be too trusting. If the person says to jump off a cliff, she will do it: no questions ask most of the time. However, she isn’t a brainless puppet. She where she follows her own will and do what she wants. She is a rebel at heart and will not be manipulated to far-even if she cares for the person that manipulates her.

She has a mask personality that she puts up in public. This personality is very different from her true nature and is the opposite of how she truly feels. When she is in her fake mask personality in place she is happy and cheerful. She seems to be a ray of sunshine and a prankster. She appears to easy going and easily brushes trouble aside. She is very gentle and to many considered to be a motherly figure. She also can be a voice of reason and help smooth the worries of the people of people. This personality is a combination of her true personality and a fake one.

Why does she show this personality even if she is not truly happy and cheerful? She doesn’t want the people around her to worry about her. She doesn’t want them to wallow in their misery and be like her also. She believes if she is depressed she will influence the feeling of others. So she tries to put the bright faced on so that they think she is fine

However her caring and gentle along with being the voice of reason is part of her true personality and is not fake. Because of her putting on a fake personality most of the time she developed she became a very good actor. This is why she is able to do her mask personality so easy these days and make it so convincing. The people who know that her happy persona is really fake think this mask is super creepy. It usually gives them the chills.

In reality Ayame is a depressed soul. She really thinks thing on the negative side and is easily hurt by comments and actions. She usually mopes around and has an empty look in her eyes when they see her. Recently, she is just starting to warm up, be a bit more cheerful, and be more social and trusting. However, this can be easily shattered like glass and go back to her depressed state.

She also has many other quirks and traits that make her unusual. She most of the dozes off and falls asleep. She can be a bit blunt and tell the truth-no matter how bad it is. She also is known to state the obvious and is known to be sarcastic. Finally, she is known to have a short and mean temper. If someone irritates her, she will pull out her harrisen and chases them around the area.

Because of an 'incident' she gained another personality. This personality is hostile, dangerous, and deadly. It is highly thingyy and it usually speaks loaded with sarcasm/rudeness. It tends to be very blunt and a bit sadistic. However it is not evil- just overly protective of itself and the true Ayame.


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◊ && This is Me ◊

Can't beat me at
# Intelligent
# Adaptable
# Reliable
# Determined (when focused)
# Strategist
# Skilled Duelist
# Loyal

Though you may win at
-English (the written language- her worst subject)
-Violent/bad temper
- Lazy
- Bi-Polar
- Very sarcastic/sharp tongue
- Known to insult people (You know when Kaiba calls Joey a Monkey? She call people much worse things sometimes)
- Unmotivated most of the time/ Shows little spirit
-Moody
-Easily gets lost
-Stubborn
-Rodents/Bugs- she is terrified of them
-Frail Health

I Like
# Cold Weather/Winter/Nighttime
#Snow Cones/Asian Food
#Intelligent Conversations and Intelligent People
# Quietness/Calmness/Logic
#Star Gazing
#Shiny Objects
#Her 'Pretties' aka her Special Cards
# Video Games
#Strategy Games
#Sleeping
#Reading

I Don't
-Spicy/Salty/Sweet food
- People who get in her way
- Sunshine/Hot and Sunny Weather/Spring/
- Idiots/Morons/Hot Heads
- Spell Casters (the type in Duel Monsters)
- Things that bend the law of logic (magic and that other blah)
-Disorganization
-Things not planned

Keep Away
* Being Left Alone
* Betrayal
* Losing her only blood relative left- her elder cousion
Abilities
Expertise on Technology and Computers- She is very intelligent about the use of technology. She is also very good at fixing it.
She is also very good as using computers as well.

Fighting- This was something developed during her childhood. During those years. She gained an orthodox fighting style that seems a bit random but effective.
Extra
Nationality: ¼ Egyptian; ¼ Chinese; ½ Japanese

She carries a Harrisen most of the time. She usually uses it to wack on the head when they are acting like idiots/morons or when they piss her off.


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◊ && This is a Champion ◊

Yukiko was walking down the streets humming a soft tune as she bobbed her head up and down. She was dressed in a fancy kimono style dress with a thick black cloak that covered her features along with bandages wrapping her hands. However, she was not completely helpless. Underneath her dress was her fighting out, just in case she got into a scrambled.

She knew she shouldn't be around these parts. However, since she was becoming part Genin soon, she needed to make all of the use of her free time as much as possible. Because she will probably go on those boring D ranked so called missions and train.

She blinked and stopped when she noticed one black haired boy and a white hair boy took on some thugs. She noticed them fight and decided to watch from a safe distance. As she watched them fight she admitted they were good. She narrowed her eyes when she heard the word Sharigan. She and her clan heard of the bloodline and what they heard: they can steal someones hard work. That isn't good in her opinion. her eyes narrowed again when she noticed the bartender got assassinated. Why was he assassinated, she didn't know.

She sighed and began walking away. She knew killing without reason was wrong. However, the Seiryu clan way is not interfere unless needed. She glared at the site on the site infront of her. It seemed some thugs, around 10, were there and waiting for her. Why were thugs infesting these parts these day.

"Look, I'm not in a good. So I wanna make it clear: bug off." Yukiko growled and hissed at the thugs, showing her fang like teeth. "I have no time for this nonsense. Go somewhere else, okay?" With that, she flicked her wrists as if it was single to go away. However, they didn't seem intent on leaving.

GAH! I'M LATE! I'M F***ING D*** L**!!" A femine voice shouted from a distance, to the east of where team 1 was. After this was said, many people was staring at where the voice probably came from. Why everyone was looking at that direction. It was mainly because of the source of the sound and ruckus was coming down that way.

Down coming down a path was a girl around 14 years old. She had messy, uncombed crimson red red hair. Her eyes are full of anger and frustration.
She was wearing a black and red untidy shirt and loose grey pants. In her mouth was a piece of toast and in her left hand was a comb. Noticing Val,Kyio, and Taikan, she walked over to them, brushing her hair and finishing her toast as she does this.

"So...You two are two are my teammates. How odd...I thought the usual system is two males and one female. We must be the odd bunch." The girl stated with a smile on her face and a grin at she stared at Val and Taikan. Her sharp teeth were revealed and her emerald eyes glittered in the light.

"Yeah! Your the weirdo!" A random villager shouted at the girl. He was about to say something else however he was interrupted by the temperture rising quickly. The source of it was the red haired girl whose eyes were now flashing gold.

"I DARE you to say that to my face again...." The girl's voice now not cheerful anymore. She looked clearly pissed off and not in a good mood. "I had to f***ing run here, eating my breakfeast on the run, just because the blasted rooster forgot to woke up! So I am not in a good mood today! So shut it!" The loud village meeped and backed away.

The girl turned to her future teammates and sensei with an embarrassed look on her face. "So sorry for showing my hot temper and foul language. It is a common trait among my clan you see...Anyway I am Saiha of the Suzaku clan. Pleased to meet your acquittance." Saiha stated with a sheepish look on her face and lays a hand on the back of her head

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[Bakura Ryou & Yami no Bakura]

First off, I can tell that you haven't proofread your application at all. That is because there are frequent mistakes, and not even simply spelling errors, but also such things as missing or extra words you forgot to remove when you changed your ideas around, or wrongly employed prepositions.

Secondly, your character's appearance borders on Mary Sue, especially the eyes with their mild color-changing trait.

Your history is a bit shaky, complete with gratuitous and unnecessary twists, and it constantly defies realism, starting right with the beginning, where your character does things that are practically impossible at her age (such as finding out about her origins from diary entries). Further on, there is no consideration for the organization and culture of the various settings you put her through, and you fail to explain exactly how the events in her life affected her; or more accurately, I don't think she's half as affected as she should be.

And speaking of events that should have affected her more, most of them seem to be mostly the work of deus ex machina; I understand that you wanted to add some dramatic elements to your character's past, but it should have been your main concern to make them credible, and only after that to make them striking/impressive. This goes hand in hand with the lack of impact they had on your character. And I'll also mention that you probably copied bits of history from another character of yours, because although this one's name is Ayame, you keep calling her Yukiko. Same with her cousin, whom you keep calling Apollo.

For the personality section, there is only so little of it that matches with your lists, which is once again not a good thing. You repeated some of your ideas, while leaving some others unexplained, especially towards the end where you just briefly mentioned some out-of-the-blue other personality. In order to have your character be such a mess, you would need to tie it in a credible fashion to various things that happened to her, which you did not do. You just wrote a personality that doesn't have a connection with her background almost at all.

And lastly, your samples do not meet the standards we have for any role-play which will be carried out on this site. First off, you control more than just your character in them, which gives us no hint as to whether you're able to avoid god-moding or not, or to, for that matter, meet our word requirements when you're posting with just your character. I am also familiar with the fandom they come from, and I have to say that there are several things about your posts that I would never agree to see in said fandom, as they break its realism.

All of this proves to me that: one - you did not put enough effort into the application so that it would meet our standards; and two - you might not even be able to meet said standards. Which all in all forces me to deny this application, as you fail to demonstrate, through it, why we should accept you.